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Originally Posted by EnzoR

All comments are welcome don't be shy, I could really use input Ladies and gents

My feedback (and I mean for this to be as constructive as possible)

• If you're going to play music over your dialogue, record it on a separate track. Having a stereo on in the same room while you speak live drowns you out
• your audio during the dialog is clipping.
• The entire video is a monologue, and it seems like the whole focus of the show is how cool you are. This might work within your inner circle or your chick, but the the rest of the internet thinks, "who the **** is this c o c k y dbag?"
• You're not famous, so there's no motivation for me to care about your opinions. You need to capture my attention. Go on location, have someone write a few jokes for you, interview people, etc. Just a few ideas.