[aldaron327]

I read through it and enjoyed it. One of the comments I read about your article did a pretty decent job of being positively critical. Personally, I thought that you did a good job of tying in the "action sequences" with the "mundane parts" and disagree with him on that point. My only critical observation was the way you typed out some of the driving sequence parts. They weren't hard to follow, and I'm not really sure how to do it "better" but I think you could get more out of them if you could have worded them just a little differently.

All in all, I thought it was a great read and like anyone who writes, with more practice, your style will mature. Great effort!

Best of luck to you!

-Tim